Learning Goal: I’m working on a writing project and need the explanation and answer to help me learn.
Take a look at this edit In red and make it flow better and more clearly
red highlights mean it make no sense
yellow highlights means needs work
but the whole speech is really rough so edit in red ink and addition statements in purple or blues.
here’s a site with a how to guide
https://myperfectwords.com/blog/speech-writing/graduation-speech
the speech is attached
with my ideas and statements please create a more concrete speech please make my draft sound better