I do need help revising the outline / rough draft he did. There is a bit of a back story so I was hoping if we can speak in person. i will pay now but need to explain what is needed
He is an athlete in college and I know he is struggling in English, yes I will it may take me a minute to pull up, be patient
Write a rough draft of your introduction paragraph for Essay #5 and a rough outline of what you plan on covering in the body paragraphs.
Remember that an introduction should include:
An interesting opening strategy in the first sentence or two to “hook” the reader. Examples of opening strategies include:
An interesting quotation
An interesting fact
A question
A brief story or vivid description of something related to your essay
A few sentences of background information
A clear, effective thesis that identifies the topic and makes a statement that is arguable or in need of explanation
The outline should include:
A topic sentence for each paragraph you plan on writing
A short description (one sentence) of what the paragraph will do to develop and support the idea in the topic sentence (including which sources you will use in which paragraphs)
Rubric
Essay 5 Introduction and Outline
Essay 5 Introduction and Outline
Criteria Ratings Pts
This criterion is linked to a Learning Outcome Opening Strategy
3 to >2.7 pts
Excellent
Introduction a lively opening strategy that shows creativity and thoughtfulness.
2.7 to >2.4 pts
Strong
Introduction includes a clear opening strategy that shows planning and effort.
2.4 to >2.1 pts
Acceptable
Introduction makes an effort at an opening strategy that could be more developed or creative.
2.1 to >1.8 pts
Needs Work
Introduction does not include a clearly identifiable opening strategy.
1.8 to >0 pts
Keep Trying
The introduction’s opening is extremely underdeveloped
3 pts
This criterion is linked to a Learning Outcome Background Information
3 to >2.7 pts
Excellent
Opening strategy is followed by background information that takes the reader’s needs into consideration.
2.7 to >2.4 pts
Strong
Opening strategy is followed by sufficient background information.
2.4 to >2.1 pts
Acceptable
Opening strategy is followed by some background information, or perhaps more than is necessary.
2.1 to >1.8 pts
Needs Work
Background information is either minimal or excessive. The writer should seek to achieve a balance of information that will help the reader grasp the topic but save specific examples from the body paragraphs.
1.8 to >0 pts
Keep Trying
The introduction lacks background information.
3 pts
This criterion is linked to a Learning Outcome Thesis
4 to >3.6 pts
Excellent
The introductory paragraph ends with a strong thesis that addresses the prompt directly, is specific, and provides some rational for the opinion expressed.
3.6 to >3.2 pts
Strong
The introductory paragraph ends with a good thesis that addresses the prompt, is specific, and provides some rational for the opinion expressed.
3.2 to >2.8 pts
Acceptable
The introductory paragraph ends with a thesis that addresses the prompt and expresses an opinion.
2.8 to >2.4 pts
Needs Work
The thesis may difficult to identify, may be located in an unconventional place or may not address the prompt directly enough.
2.4 to >0 pts
Keep Trying
Outline is lacking a thesis statement.
4 pts
This criterion is linked to a Learning Outcome Outline
20 to >18.0 pts
Excellent
Outline includes topic sentences for several paragraphs and clear explanations of supporting points. At least three references to sources.
18 to >16.0 pts
Strong
Outline includes topic sentences for several paragraphs and brief explanations of supporting points. At least two references to sources.
16 to >14.0 pts
Acceptable
Outline includes topic sentences for at least two body paragraphs and minimal explanations of supporting points. At least two references to sources.
14 to >12.0 pts
Needs Work
Outline includes topic sentences for several paragraphs but no explanations of supporting points. At least one reference is made to an outside source.
12 to >0 pts
Keep Trying
Outline may lack topic sentences OR reference to any sources
20 pts
Total Points: 30
Good annotations, Cole. The assessment portion could be stronger in your paragraphs as you discuss the authors’ credentials. That would be a good thing to expand on in the actual essay.
Your bibliographic entries are not in MLA format and are missing significant information. You should review what you learned about documenting sources in English 100. You can also consult the MLA section at
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_formatting_and_style_guide.html
Since this assignment isn’t due until Sunday, you’re welcome to resubmit to bring the score up.
that what the teacher wrote so I can pay to revise his annotated bibliography first
That is what he started for rough draft. Please remember that he isn’t academic all semester so I need someone to write it as if they weren’t that smart-lol!! don’t want to red flag