I have completed two annotated bibliographies (AB1 & AB2) that are supposed to be built upon to write the term paper. I am including the comments left by my instructor for both AB1 & AB2. Please take her comments into consideration when writing the term paper. I am also going to attach the AB1 & AB2 as well as the full text references used for both anotated bibliographies. Please use the attached references to write the term paper. I cannot use any external references outside the ones i used for my AB1 & AB2. You also need to read through the AB1 and AB2 as well as the full text reference articles to be able to write the term paper. Per the comment left by my instructor, do not use the reference by Roohafza et al. article as my instructor does not think it is a good source to use to support my chosen PICOT question. Please reach out to me if you need any clarification, thank you.
AB1 Instructor comments
Rejoice, this is really good! only further remark is that your articles don’t exactly support your PICOT. Suggestion to revise to as you’ve written but change “minimizing risk factors for a cardiovascular event” your original PICOT would require looking at, for example, people who follow a heart healthy diet and exercise daily and tracking them over time to see whether they experience an actual cardiac event (this would actually be a really hard study to implement and it would prob be more of an informatics-driven study based on masses of health data obtained retrospectively)
AB2 Instructor comments
Roohafza et al. article is not the *most* appropriate to support your PICOT since it does not discuss an intervention. Also, Minor deduction as this AB was supposed to be in the format of a synthesis matrix.
The number one thing I’m seeing is a lack of synthesis across articles. One thing that is really important to keep in mind for your term paper is that you need to be making clear compare/contrast statements across all your articles and critically appraising the evidence presented in the articles. That’s making sure you’re including statements that speak to p-value significance for quant articles, methodologies/level of evidence, sample sizes/generalizability, etc. Ultimately, If your term paper reads like all article summaries more or less in a list, you are likely going to see some deductions in your rubric. (Here’s another resource that may be helpful for synthesis). https://www.simplypsychology.org/synthesising.html
This mini-literature review should be in APA 7th edition student paper format. It should be approximately 7 pages in length (excluding cover page and reference list). It should reflect a synthesis of your findings from the two annotated bibliographies and propose a study to address the gap in the literature. See rubric for additional detail:
Criteria Ratings Pts
Purpose/Problem Statement
10 to >8 pts
Exceeds expectations
Identifies a relevant research topic and a thesis that provides direction for the paper that is engaging and thought provoking, The thesis clearly and concisely states the position, premise, or hypothesis and is consistently the focal point throughout the paper.
8 to >6 pts
Meets expectations
Identifies a relevant research topic and a thesis that provides adequate direction for the paper with some degree of interest for the reader. The thesis states the position, premise, or hypothesis, and is the focal point of the paper for the most part.
6 to >3 pts
Progressing towards expectations
Identifies a research topic but may be too broad in scope and/or the thesis is somewhat unclear and needs to be developed further. Focal point is not consistently maintained throughout the paper.
3 to >0 pts
Does not meet expectations
Fails to identify a relevant research topic or is not clearly defined and/or the paper lacks focus throughout.
/ 10 pts
Analysis
30 to >25 pts
Exceeds expectations
Demonstrates a sophisticated understanding and careful, critical analysis of the research topic and thesis (argument). Compares/contrasts perspectives, considers counter arguments or opposing positions, and draws original and thoughtful conclusions with future implications.
25 to >18 pts
Meets expectations
Demonstrates an understanding and some critical analysis of the research topic and thesis (argument). Adequately compares/contrasts perspectives, counter-arguments, or opposing positions but broader connections and/or implications are not as thoroughly explored.
18 to >12 pts
Progressing towards expectations
Demonstrates general understanding with limited critical analysis of the research topic and thesis (argument). Summarizes perspectives, counter-arguments, or opposing positions.
12 to >0 pts
Does not meet expectations
Demonstrates a lack of understanding and inadequate analysis of the research topic and thesis. Analysis is superficial based on opinions and preferences rather than critical analysis.
/ 30 pts
Evidence (Sources)
30 to >25 pts
Exceeds expectations
Provides compelling and accurate evidence to support in-depth the central position. Research sources are highly relevant, accurate, and reliable and add to the strength of the paper; and are effectively referenced and cited throughout the paper.
25 to >18 pts
Meets expectations
Provides essential, accurate evidence to support the central position with the required (7) research sources including 1 source from a periodical database that are mostly relevant, accurate, and reliable. Sources are referenced and cited appropriately throughout the paper for the most part.
18 to >12 pts
Progressing towards expectations
Provides some evidence to support the central position with only a few research sources. Some sources may not be relevant, accurate, and reliable and/or appropriately referenced and cited in the paper.
12 to >0 pts
Does not meet expectations
Lacks sufficient research sources to support the central position and/or, if included, are generally not relevant, accurate, or reliable. Contains numerous factual mistakes, omissions, or oversimplifications. Sources, if included, are not properly referenced and cited in the paper.
/ 30 pts
Organization
10 to >8 pts
Exceeds expectations
Paper is effectively organized. Ideas are arranged logically, flow smoothly, with a strong progression of thought from paragraph to paragraph connecting to the central position. Includes all required components (introduction, body, conclusion, Reference List, etc.).
8 to >6 pts
Meets expectations
Paper is adequately organized. Ideas are arranged reasonably with a progression of thought from paragraph to paragraph connecting to the central position. Includes required components (introduction, body, conclusion, Reference List, etc.) for the most part.
6 to >4 pts
Progressing towards expectations
Paper is somewhat organized, although occasionally ideas from paragraph to paragraph may not flow well and/or connect to the central position or be clear as a whole. May be missing a required component and/or components may be less than complete.
4 to >0 pts
Does not meet expectations
Paper lacks logical organization and impedes readers’ comprehension of ideas. Central position is rarely evident from paragraph to paragraph and/or the paper is missing multiple required components.
/ 10 pts
Writing Quality & Formatting
10 to >8 pts
Exceeds expectations
Paper is well written and clear using APA guidelines and standard English characterized by elements of a strong writing style. Basically free from grammar, punctuation, spelling, usage, or formatting errors.
8 to >6 pts
Meets expectations
Paper shows above average writing style and clarity in writing using standard English and following APA guidelines. Minor errors in grammar, punctuation, spelling, usage, and/or formatting.
6 to >4 pts
Progressing towards expectations
Paper shows an average and/or casual writing style using standard English and following APA guidelines. Some errors in spelling, grammar, punctuation, usage, and/or formatting.
4 to >0 pts
Does not meet expectations
Paper shows a below average/poor writing style lacking in elements of appropriate standard English and following proper APA guidelines. Frequent errors in spelling, grammar, punctuation, spelling, usage, and/or formatting.
/ 10 pts
Timeliness & Length
10 to >8 pts
Exceeds expectations
Paper is submitted by the deadline and meets the required length (6-8 pages for the body).
8 to >6 pts
Meets expectations
Paper is submitted within 1 day (24 hours) after the deadline and meets the required length (6-8 pages for the body).
6 to >3 pts
Progressing towards expectations
Paper is submitted 1-2 days (25-48 hours) after the deadline and/or is somewhat lacking (or exceeds) the required length.
3 to >0 pts
Does not meet expectations
Paper is submitted 2-3 days (49-72 hours) or more after the deadline and/or substantially lacks/exceeds the required length.
/ 10 pts