My essay needs a introduction, a facts section like how many people are affected by this social injustice, a stories section: give voice to those affected by the injustice that has been identified, a heroes section so who are the people/organizations that are helping battle the injustice and what can we do to help, finally a conclusion. All paragraphs need at least 2 evidence. ALL Looked-Up Evidence is Quoted and/or Cited.
I need a bibliography it should look like this: AuthorLastName, AuthorFirstName. “Title of the Article or Chapter.” Title of the Website, Journal, or Book. Publication info, if you have it. Accessed Month Day, Year of when you looked it up. URL
This is my teachers rubric.
________/200
A
This essay demonstrates clear and consistent mastery, although it may have minor errors
B
Demonstrates reasonably consistent mastery, although it may have occasional errors or lapses in quality.
C
Demonstrates adequate mastery although it has lapses in quality.
D
Demonstrates developing mastery and has ONE OR MORE of the following significant weaknesses.
F
Demonstrates little to no mastery and has ONE OR MORE of the following weaknesses.
Focus
Introduction and Claims
________/20
Effectively and insightfully develops an intro with an arguable thesis and then maintains strong and connected claims on the issue
Effectively develops an introduction with an arguable thesis and then maintains related claims on the issue
Effectively develops an introduction with an arguable thesis and then maintains related claims on the issue
Develops an introduction with a thesis about the issue, but then inconsistent claims lose focus
Develops an introduction with a thesis about the issue, but then inconsistent claims lose focus
Support and Elaboration
Researched evidence, stories that bring the issue to life, and warrants that recognize the complexity of the issue and demand social justice
________/100
Demonstrates outstanding critical and compassionate thinking, using clearly appropriate and varied evidence and examples.
Thoughtful and detailed warrants make appropriate connections between evidence, thesis, and real life and explore the issue’s deeply human complexities with urgency & passion.
Demonstrates strong critical and compassionate thinking, using appropriate and varied evidence and examples.
Thoughtful warrants make appropriate connections between evidence, thesis, and real life and acknowledge the issue’s complexities with a sense of human decency.
Demonstrates competent critical and compassionate thinking, using adequate evidence and examples.
Adequate warrants make appropriate connections between evidence, thesis, and real life, going beyond what is merely repeated or obvious.
Demonstrates some critical and compassionate thinking, using inconsistent evidence and examples.
Inconsistent warrants attempt to make connections between evidence, thesis, and real life but may lapse into what is repeated or obvious.
Demonstrates weak critical and compassionate thinking, using inappropriate or insufficient evidence and examples.
Deficient warrants fail to make appropriate connections between evidence, thesis, and real life, falling into obvious repetition or absence.
Logical Flow and Transitions
Context, Connection, and Order of Information
________/20
Well-organized and clearly coherent, with a smooth progression of ideas both within and between paragraphs.
The paper builds up to an insightful and persuasive conclusion.
Well-organized and sufficiently coherent, with a progression of ideas both within and between paragraphs.
The paper builds up to a reasonably insightful & persuasive conclusion.
Generally organized and coherent, with some progression of ideas both within and between paragraphs.
The paper ends with a persuasive but somewhat reiterative conclusion.
Simplistically organized and/or inconsistently coherent, with lapses both within & between paragraphs.
The paper ends with a primarily reiterative conclusion.
Poorly organized and/or incoherent, with serious lapses of focus & clarity within and between paragraphs.
The paper ends with a disjointed or indiscernible conclusion.
Mechanics, Style, and Language
Proofreading, Editing, Word Choice, Sentence Structure
________/10
Masterful use of language includes varied, apt, and accurate vocabulary as well as meaningful variety in sentence structure, and the paper is free of nearly all errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics.
Skillful use of language includes appropriate vocabulary as well as reasonable variety in sentence structure, and the paper is generally free of errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics.
Adequate use of language includes generally appropriate vocabulary as well as some variety in sentence structure, and the paper’s errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics do not obscure the writer’s meaning.
Developing use of language may include simplistic vocabulary and/or sentence structure, and the paper may have an accumulation of errors that distract from, but do not obscure, the writer’s meaning.
Fundamentally limited or incorrect use of language may demonstrate severe flaws in vocabulary and/or sentence structure; significant errors in proofreading end up obscuring the writer’s meaning.
Citation Control
Parenthetical Citations and Works Cited page
________/30
Parenthetical citations are complete, consistent, and accurately formatted.
Works Cited page is complete, consistent, and accurately formatted.
Parenthetical citations are complete and (mostly) accurately formatted.
Works Cited page is complete, consistent, and (mostly) accurately formatted.
Parenthetical citations are (generally) complete and (generally) accurately formatted.
Works Cited page is complete but inconsistently/inaccurately formatted.
THIS BLACK BOX DOES NOT APPLY TO THE FINAL DRAFT.
If the RED BOX is circled → → , you have ignored previous feedback, samples, and warnings, and you have failed the paper..
Egregious omissions, inconsistencies, and/or errors are serious enough to FAIL this paper and may demonstrate academic dishonesty. YOU MUST REVISE SUCCESSFULLY FOR SRP.11 (see Canvas) or RE-TAKE THE CLASS
College-Ready Format
Title Page, Numbers, Spacing
________/10
Your format is 100% ready for SRP graduation — it looks its best, everything is in place, and you’ve proven you’re ready for college and life beyond Niles North!
Your format is almost ready for SRP graduation — it looks good, almost everything is in place, and you’ve proven you’re pretty much ready for college and life beyond Niles North!
Your format is getting ready for SRP graduation — it looks okay, but not everything is in place, and you should have gotten the spinach out of the paper’s teeth before its resubmission.
Your format was not really ready for SRP graduation — it has ignored important guidelines about formata and should have gotten itself together before final resubmission.
Your format was not at all ready for SRP graduation — it has ignored all or nearly all guidelines and should have gotten itself together before its final resubmission..
Improvement
________/10
Your effort, engagement, and overall improvement demonstrate that you are writing to the very best of your ability as you hand in this final draft.
Your effort, engagement, and overall improvement demonstrate that you are writing close to your best as you hand in this final draft.
Your effort, engagement, and inconsistent improvement over time demonstrate that you may be settling for “close enough” in this final draft.
Your minimal effort, engagement, or improvement over time demonstrate that you may have settled for less than your best in this final draft.
The final paper did not demonstrate sufficient effort, engagement, or improvement over time to make this a passing final draft.
Here is some evidence to help that I found.
WORKS CITED
Alterman, Jon B. “Protest, Social Media, and Censorship in Iran.” CSIS, 18 October 2022, https://www.csis.org/analysis/protest-social-media-and-censorship-iran. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Anvari, Amir-Hadi. “New Data Suggest More People Died In Iran During Protests.” Iran International, 24 January 2023, https://www.iranintl.com/en/202301240166. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Hajipour, Shervin. “Baraye.” YouTube, Speedy5310, 18 March 2023, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0th9_v-BbUI. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Hamidi, Mahmoud. “Above 75 Percent of Iran’s Population Participate in Anti-Regime Protests.” Iran News Update, 7 September 2022, https://irannewsupdate.com/news/insider/above-75-percent-of-irans-population-participate-in-anti-regime-protests/. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Tabrizy, Nilo. “Videos Show Evidence of Escalating Crackdown on Iranian Protests.” The Washington Post, 10 March 2023, https://www.washingtonpost.com/world/2023/02/02/iran-protests-government/. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Tawfeeq, Mohammed. “At Least 23 Children Killed in Iran Protests in September, Rights Group Says.” CNN, 14 October 2022, https://www.cnn.com/2022/10/14/middleeast/iran-protests-children-dead-amnesty-report-intl-hnk/index.html. Accessed 7 April 2023.
“What We Do.” Abdorrahman Boroumand Center, https://www.iranrights.org/center/what. Accessed 7 April 2023.
“What We Do – Center for Human Rights in Iran.” Center for Human Rights in Iran, https://iranhumanrights.org/what_we_do/. Accessed 7 April 2023.
( I tried fixing the ones that you had commented were not correct. Also for the IXL the substitutes only mentioned that we needed to do the 9th-grade one and I did the Capitalizing Titles because I wasn’t sure which one you wanted.)
WORKS CITED
Alterman, Jon B. “Protest, Social Media, and Censorship in Iran.” CSIS, 18 October 2022, https://www.csis.org/analysis/protest-social-media-and-censorship-iran. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Anvari, Amir-Hadi. “New Data Suggest More People Died In Iran During Protests.” Iran International, 24 January 2023, https://www.iranintl.com/en/202301240166. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Hajipour, Shervin. “Baraye.” YouTube, Speedy5310, 18 March 2023, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0th9_v-BbUI. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Hamidi, Mahmoud. “Above 75 Percent of Iran’s Population Participate in Anti-Regime Protests.” Iran News Update, 7 September 2022, https://irannewsupdate.com/news/insider/above-75-percent-of-irans-population-participate-in-anti-regime-protests/. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Tabrizy, Nilo. “Videos Show Evidence of Escalating Crackdown on Iranian Protests.” The Washington Post, 10 March 2023, https://www.washingtonpost.com/world/2023/02/02/iran-protests-government/. Accessed 7 April 2023.
Tawfeeq, Mohammed. “At Least 23 Children Killed in Iran Protests in September, Rights Group Says.” CNN, 14 October 2022, https://www.cnn.com/2022/10/14/middleeast/iran-protests-children-dead-amnesty-report-intl-hnk/index.html. Accessed 7 April 2023.
“What We Do.” Abdorrahman Boroumand Center, https://www.iranrights.org/center/what. Accessed 7 April 2023.
“What We Do – Center for Human Rights in Iran.” Center for Human Rights in Iran, https://iranhumanrights.org/what_we_do/. Accessed 7 April 2023.
( I tried fixing the ones that you had commented were not correct. Also for the IXL the substitutes only mentioned that we needed to do the 9th-grade one and I did the Capitalizing Titles because I wasn’t sure which one you wanted.)